Flashback:
The narrative is about a young black male growing up in an estate where there is high knife and gun crime. The young male growing up gets involved with the wrong people selling class A drugs out to people willing to buy. As the young male becomes older and wiser he wants out in selling the drugs as he has a girlfriend who's pregnant. Because of this she wants him to find a proper job to support there unborn daughter. The black male character visits the people who he sells the drugs for because he wants out, but he learns that its not that easy so they make him deliver one last package to client in an estate if he wants.. Thinking about his family and wanting out he decided to do the job only on one condition that they would keep to there word. On his way to deliver the package he thinks about his girlfriend and his baby. He arrives at the estate with kids playing football on the street he walks up the stairs to be suddenly jumped by a Masked Character. The Masked Character takes the package and leaves him for dead. In his last moment he decides to pick his phone and call his girlfriend and tell her he loves her and his unborn baby. Tears run down his face. His girlfriend starts to cry, confused and in panic she asks him where he is. Unexpectedly the Masked Character returns to finish him off. The Masked Character stamps on his face and the screen blacks out.
Start:
The young Black male is laying on the floor dialing his girlfriends number. Picking up he expressing how much he loves her and his unborn baby with tears running down his face. His girlfriend starts to cry, confused and in panic she asks him where he is. Unexpectedly the Masked Character returns to finish him off. The Masked Character stamps on his face and the screen blacks out.
The Enigma code in the storyline is the identity of the masked character who jumped the young black male. Another Enigma Code is why he got jumped.
The Protagonist is the young black male (His Flashback of the chain of events leading up to the present time).
Mr Bush's Comments:
1. Decide on scene(s) to Show in the extract.
2. Flashback of what? to what Scene?
3. Title?
4. Scheduling details?
WWW: Detailed Narrative
Start:
The young Black male is laying on the floor dialing his girlfriends number. Picking up he expressing how much he loves her and his unborn baby with tears running down his face. His girlfriend starts to cry, confused and in panic she asks him where he is. Unexpectedly the Masked Character returns to finish him off. The Masked Character stamps on his face and the screen blacks out.
The Enigma code in the storyline is the identity of the masked character who jumped the young black male. Another Enigma Code is why he got jumped.
The Protagonist is the young black male (His Flashback of the chain of events leading up to the present time).
Mr Bush's Comments:
1. Decide on scene(s) to Show in the extract.
2. Flashback of what? to what Scene?
3. Title?
4. Scheduling details?
WWW: Detailed Narrative
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